Abolish the Adverbs

adverbs  I just finished reading this article and I must say it was an eye opener. I think this is the first time I’ve had an inkling of understanding of what people mean when they say you should always ‘show instead of tell’. I can’t believe how much I rely on adverbs in my writing–I didn’t even know it was considered such a bad habit. If you’re as guilty as me of doing this then this article should be very helpful to you, as it was to me. I can’t wait to go over some of the stories I’m working on and try to eliminate those !@#$ adverbs.

Happy Writing

Writing Tips: Abolish the Adverbs

Posted by Melissa Donovan on January 30, 2013 ·

Are they slowly running or are they jogging?

Adjectives and adverbs are modifiers. Adjectives modify nouns whereas adverbs modify verbs, other adverbs, adjectives, phrases, and clauses. In fact, an adverb can modify an entire sentence. This gives adverbs a rather large playing field; maybe that explains why they are overused.

For example, car is a noun and red is an adjective. Put them together and you get a red car. The word run is a verb and the word quickly is an adverb. Put them together and you get run quickly.

But run quickly is better stated as sprint.

The examples above demonstrate why adjectives can be useful in writing and why adverbs are usually useless. Too often, adverbs are unnecessary and serve only to clutter a piece of writing.

Why Adverbs Are Weak and How They Weaken Your Writing

“The road to hell is paved with adverbs.” ~ Stephen King

Here’s a list of 3732 adverbs. The vast majority of them end in -ly, and these are among the most useless adverbs although they are often cited as examples. Ask someone how to identify an adverb and they’ll either tell you it modifies a verb or it’s one of those words that ends in -ly. Why are adverbs that end in -ly so awful? I’m glad you asked. Let’s take a look at an example sentence:

“Why don’t you come over here and sit by me?” she asked flirtatiously.

It’s a horrid sentence. The adverb flirtatiously is practically an insult to readers. It tells them how she asked the question when instead, it should show how she asked:

“Why don’t you come over here and sit by me?” she asked, batting her eyelashes.

It may not be the greatest sentence ever written, but showing the character batting her eyelashes is a lot better than telling readers she asked a question flirtatiously.

Most adverbs either tell us what we already know or use too many words to communicate an image or idea. Let’s look at an adverb that modifies an adjective:

It’s a very warm day.

Once we write that a day is warm, does it being very warm change the day in the reader’s mind? The word very does nothing other than intensify the word that follows it and it does so poorly. Often, the word very and the word it modifies can both be eliminated and replaced with a single word that is more precise:

It’s a hot day.

In this sentence, we don’t need the word very or the word warm. The word hot does the job. It’s clearer and more concise, which is the mark of strong writing.

Writing Tips for Using Adverbs Wisely

“Adverbs are the tool of the lazy writer.” ~ Mark Twain

I’m always on the lookout for unnecessary words in my own writing. I find that seeking out adverbs is a good way to discover words I can cut to tighten my prose. I may not catch them all but I sure try. Here are some guidelines I apply when dealing with adverbs:

  • Don’t be lazy. Choosing the right word is never a waste of time.
  • Stay away from adverbs that state the obvious. One does not scream loudly because by definition, screaming is done loudly.
  • If a sentence is too short, don’t add a bunch of adverbs (or adjectives) to make it longer.
  • Train your eye to catch adverbs when you’re editing and proofreading.
  • When you spot an adverb, do your best to rewrite the sentence without it.
  • Only use an adverb if it’s necessary and you can’t convey the same meaning without it.
  • Avoid vague or non-descriptive adverbs. Ask whether the adverb tells the reader something that you can show through imagery and description.
  • Don’t use an adverb as a crutch for a verb (or any other word). Look for a better verb. If necessary, write a better sentence.
  • Sometimes, when you eliminate a single adverb, you have to replace it with several words. It took three words (batting her eyelashes) to replace one adverb (flirtatiously) but the sentence became clearer and more vivid.
  • Don’t be redundant. One does not stealthily creep because to creep is to move with stealth.
  • When you do use adverbs, use them intentionally and with purpose.
  • Make it a goal to never use the words very or really.

Are You Overusing Adverbs?

Here’s an exercise you can do to gauge your use of adverbs:

Dig through your writing and find a final draft that has been edited and proofread. Go through and highlight every adverb. Ask a friend to check it and see if you missed any. How many adverbs did you find? How many adverbs were there per 100 words? Per 1000? Remove each adverb and ask whether doing so changes the meaning of the sentence. If it does change the meaning, then rewrite the sentence without an adverb. Now compare the original sentences with the adverbs intact to the new sentences that don’t have any adverbs. Which ones are better?

Using Adverbs

So, when is it okay to use an adverb? When you absolutely must. Here are some examples of sentences that use adverbs well (the adverbs are italicized):

Congress recently passed a new law.

She entered the room silently.

He drives a dark green sedan.

As you can see, sometimes we need adverbs. We just need to use them sparingly, which is a good rule of thumb for using words in general.

Inserted from <http://www.writingforward.com/category/writing-tips>

About gedwardsmith

A new writer just trying to make at least one reader forget their problems, if only for a minute or two.
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3 Responses to Abolish the Adverbs

  1. ghoststoriesfiction says:

    Thank you for this informative piece you have written here. Being an amateur and it makes you wonder on reading this how often I might use them while writing. Will have to check that out. Really found this helpful. Thank you :)

    • gedwardsmith says:

      I’m glad you found this as helpful as I did. Being an amateur writer myself it seems like every day is an opportunity to learn. By the way I love you’re Ghost Watching series. I think they’re outstanding. Keep up the good work.

      Happy Writing

  2. Pingback: Use Adverbs in Moderation | Melissa Janda - the Buzz on Writing

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